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Bottled Up
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03-21-2013, 01:35 PM
I really like this. The imagery is vague enough to let the reader create their own image, but loses no potency. It seems like a snap-shot of death and the tone carries this well. I leave with an impression, but not a lasting element to take away from it. If you added a single, telling line that forcefully imprints a lasting and memorable image to define the theme, this poem would be perfect to me.
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Bottled Up - by saeity - 03-21-2013, 04:02 AM
RE: Bottled Up - by Bloggsworth - 03-21-2013, 04:55 AM
RE: Bottled Up - by saeity - 03-21-2013, 09:09 AM
RE: Bottled Up - by Crepuscule - 03-21-2013, 08:15 AM
RE: Bottled Up - by NakedBear - 03-21-2013, 09:27 AM
RE: Bottled Up - by joshuacan - 03-21-2013, 01:35 PM
RE: Bottled Up - by mariamuse - 03-21-2013, 03:42 PM
RE: Bottled Up - by justcloudy - 03-21-2013, 06:25 PM
RE: Bottled Up - by newsclippings - 03-21-2013, 08:37 PM
RE: Bottled Up - by NakedBear - 03-23-2013, 03:58 PM
RE: Bottled Up - by saeity - 03-23-2013, 10:24 PM
RE: Bottled Up - by tectak - 03-24-2013, 09:53 PM
RE: Bottled Up - by saeity - 03-26-2013, 08:23 PM
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