03-21-2013, 05:39 AM
Hi,
I liked the initial read for the gentle nature images, but then when it came down to savouring the individual words and lines I found myself faltering on a couple of the lines.
For example L2, to my reading, fleshed out says; The [her] rhythmic flow, makes a swift comment, or observation [concerning] her heartbeat. I'm sorry but this line has not reached me in terms of presenting an image I can get hold of.
Then again in L4 I struggled because I did not understand the reference to the Mandela moon. Of course this might just be me being dense...it happens ...frequently.
I was trying to make this an image of being free in body and spirit, but was not convinced I had this right.
So to sum up I really wanted to like this one as I'm a sucker for any nature images. I liked lines 1& 3. Loved L 5. I enjoyed the sound of L4 and the idea of the image, but was left a little lost as to the meaning.
Thanks for sharing and value & appreciate all the other posts you have been making on the site.
All the best AJ.
I liked the initial read for the gentle nature images, but then when it came down to savouring the individual words and lines I found myself faltering on a couple of the lines.
For example L2, to my reading, fleshed out says; The [her] rhythmic flow, makes a swift comment, or observation [concerning] her heartbeat. I'm sorry but this line has not reached me in terms of presenting an image I can get hold of.
Then again in L4 I struggled because I did not understand the reference to the Mandela moon. Of course this might just be me being dense...it happens ...frequently.
I was trying to make this an image of being free in body and spirit, but was not convinced I had this right.So to sum up I really wanted to like this one as I'm a sucker for any nature images. I liked lines 1& 3. Loved L 5. I enjoyed the sound of L4 and the idea of the image, but was left a little lost as to the meaning.
Thanks for sharing and value & appreciate all the other posts you have been making on the site.
All the best AJ.