03-20-2013, 08:02 PM
Bloggsworth,
I like your idea here, the thought is poignant, but of course, it's been done before. All in all this is a nice little read but nothing much about it sticks out. It reads almost like prose, especially at the start. Try to see if you can make the beginning stronger, and insert some unique wording/images to give it some punch.
I like your idea here, the thought is poignant, but of course, it's been done before. All in all this is a nice little read but nothing much about it sticks out. It reads almost like prose, especially at the start. Try to see if you can make the beginning stronger, and insert some unique wording/images to give it some punch.
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The howling beast is back.
The howling beast is back.