03-19-2013, 07:44 PM
To all comments thank you for taking the time, I clearly need to do some work, and that I will do, however by way of offering some clarity before I work on the edit.
S1 he is flying sat in an old plane
S2 a bomb got caught on a mission it is still half in place he is on his way back (so over fields and farms) if he hits turbulence it could go off. He is stuffed really as he can’t land.
S3 his thoughts drift on the clouds, back to seeing his family and child (capital H was a mistake) he is terrified of dying and losing it a little.
S4 he hits a bad patch of turbulence, his thoughts return to his family as he thinks he's about to die, he doesn't the bomb breaks loose and in S5 it lands by accident on a farm house.
Edit time I think cheers TOMH
S1 he is flying sat in an old plane
S2 a bomb got caught on a mission it is still half in place he is on his way back (so over fields and farms) if he hits turbulence it could go off. He is stuffed really as he can’t land.
S3 his thoughts drift on the clouds, back to seeing his family and child (capital H was a mistake) he is terrified of dying and losing it a little.
S4 he hits a bad patch of turbulence, his thoughts return to his family as he thinks he's about to die, he doesn't the bomb breaks loose and in S5 it lands by accident on a farm house.
Edit time I think cheers TOMH
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