Retrospective Losses edit 1. Input milo.

[Leanne]

Time cements and paralyses, through due consideration.
What once was impulse now is thought
and circumstance. Weighed, tested, tried then stamped…
approved. The assay mark says fit for use;
suitably bland, confirmed now good for public health. -- that which is in stasis, should not be. After not nearly enough deliberation, the wrong decision has been made. Those who cannot see the foundations choose instead to copy the shape of the skyscraper in miniature -- or those who have no tongue serve us banquets that look the part, but have no spice.

Who cares a damn for what is clean or what is safe to swallow? -- I would suggest you can do without the damn -- maybe even do with making this a statement, rather than a rhetorical question.
What once was new, now is clichéd or obscure. -- for me this is too obvious, but subtlety may not serve for the wider audience, given the subject matter
Perhaps the silent thousands take offence; a hope, but not a prize.
They nonetheless obstruct us with their wounded, feeble fears.
So bandage up your weeping words , freedom is your write! -- we're mixing quite a lot of metaphors by this point -- perhaps this is a statement in itself

Blisters on my tongue are there because I have a voice.
What once was theory now is hard-edged fact,
so argue if you will; polemics push us to the edge
of new and fearsome heights. Some will fly as others
hurtle downwards:martyrs to their sweet, enlightened death. -- and many more will hurtle downwards because those who could not fly will try to elevate themselves by stepping on the shoulders of those who might have grown wings

Offend you? No, unless you think I can; but nor you, me. -- this is a key point -- those who take offence generally do so because the arrow has hit home and they won't admit to the score
What once was comment now becomes a slight against small souls. -- how dare you tell me I'm not perfect?
Can we who speak say nothing anymore? What do you want,
you who slyly crave the bow and curtsy of respect? -- respect might just be too lofty -- adulation will do for the crowd you address
Is there more of value than the naked truth? You would say, yes.

Wouldn't you?

tectak
2013