Counter Point

[tectak]

Ah....you must be across the moat. MOT stands for Ministry Of Transport. It is a legal requirement that all cars not nicked have an MOT certificate to ensure roadworthiness. This usually involves getting your car "serviced" prior to the MOT test...again, this does not apply to stolen vehicles which do not require an MOT certificate as they do not require insurance either. Wish you had never asked? Well,you are none the wiser but you are better informed.

I'm Canadian and will take what I can get!

Your poem did not suck.

You, sir, are a gentleman.

Hopefully this is an improvement.

Puma

Ranks broken,
the deciduous force fails
in the face of marching evergreens,
while the stream that cowers at their feet ...that cowers underfoot. You will see why this is suggested below
will serve victor and loser alike.
Yet the stream too is sure to die, not sure you need "too" but if you do you need commas, two.
though at the hands of the sun,though by the hot hand of the sun?
not by strangling root. thirsting/sucking/drawing root? Strangling seems odd. May be me
And as rabbits are eaten by crueller things No need for "And"
I’m eaten from within by hungry Age,
and will soon lie still
at conquering coniferous root. See end note


I've dropped the rhyme scheme and halved the length. Most of the same images in my head, in the same order.

Mikey.

Holy cadwallader...a poem!
Bloody great edit...have you just eaten something?
Just one more nit...last line." beside the cold conqueror's feet" is enough. Enough is always just right. More than enough is too much...but you did have two roots. I just thought hot hand of sun and cold feet of tree went well. Your poem.
Best,
See, it no suck!
tectak