Best Friend
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(03-15-2013, 01:56 PM)jmmc137 Wrote:  I'm the mirror on your wall,
right across from your bed,
and as your best friend,
there's some things that need to be said,
look at me and you see you,
look at me closer and you see truth,
trust me best friend, this movie is no spoof,
what moves me is your beauty,
you don't believe me? You need proof?
how about the times you sang your heart, out from the days of your youth?
or when your smile made my day, despite the missing tooth,
don't let these ignorant fools skew your point of view,
hurt people hurt people so they'll try to hurt you,
Ignore them, look at me, try to keep your virtue,
please believe me best friend, what I say to you is true,
look at me, see the rainbow your mom gave birth to.
Hi
There's a nice gentle rhyme through this.
May I suggest taken out the (and) in L 5
the poem carrys it's mesage well
but the line with hurt people
I don't get that.
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Messages In This Thread
Best Friend - by jmmc137 - 03-15-2013, 01:56 PM
RE: Best Friend - by NakedBear - 03-15-2013, 02:25 PM
RE: Best Friend - by Mattie - 03-16-2013, 03:36 AM
RE: Best Friend - by jmmc137 - 03-16-2013, 05:35 AM
RE: Best Friend - by 2onthemap - 03-17-2013, 03:07 AM
RE: Best Friend - by Aphroditeny - 03-17-2013, 07:09 AM
RE: Best Friend - by newsclippings - 03-17-2013, 08:12 AM
RE: Best Friend - by emilylundquist - 03-17-2013, 11:12 AM
RE: Best Friend - by TheArtDisarray - 03-17-2013, 03:26 PM



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