An Object (short poem)
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(03-15-2013, 09:12 AM)Jae Mc Donnell Wrote:  Recently I found an object that speaks in volumes
When I open it, it goes silent
If I show it to friends, they laugh
If I hide it, it wallows and cries
In the cold light of understanding
Its surface shows my reflection
The object: Me
Hey. Glad you've finally found yourself.

The second to last line might be fun if the "my" is replaced with "its".

I'm guessing the whole thing is meant as a riddle. Maybe you could re-work it as an actual riddle? Of course, you'll have to add a bit so the reader has a hope of solving it.

Mikey.
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An Object (short poem) - by Jae Mc Donnell - 03-15-2013, 09:12 AM
RE: An Object (short poem) - by NakedBear - 03-15-2013, 01:29 PM
RE: An Object (short poem) - by Volaticus - 03-29-2013, 12:44 AM
RE: An Object (short poem) - by IdiomsNCliches - 03-29-2013, 03:10 PM



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