03-15-2013, 08:22 AM
Hi AJ
You can't beat a good comma frenzy to get something out and off your chest. The edit smoothes this out alot, I read this as though someone had given up on life too soon, simple pleasures no longer wanted I also really enjoyed the word play and the last stanza is a perfect summation of one who stopped living too soon, very much enjoyed. Thanks TOMH
You can't beat a good comma frenzy to get something out and off your chest. The edit smoothes this out alot, I read this as though someone had given up on life too soon, simple pleasures no longer wanted I also really enjoyed the word play and the last stanza is a perfect summation of one who stopped living too soon, very much enjoyed. Thanks TOMH
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