03-13-2013, 06:54 AM
Hi
I'm almost becomeing a bore when it comes to your poetry...I liked this one too. I loved the repitition and 2nd Billy's comment that this is a form of pantoume.
Although for me this has some sad undertones and currents running through it I feel.
I got an image of a mentally weak or disturbed person from that last line and found it very poignant.
(I know a mental patient who came along [by the bus load as an outing] to my last church. He used to do an amazing a grafically correct of Michael Jackson doing his thriller dance...which he always perfomed at least once durring the service to any of the upbeat songs. It was always amusing to watch the reactions of any visitors that week.
But your poem made me think of this wonderful character and what might have been his experiance in life if he had not been in a careing enviroment).
sorry this was a bit of an odd comment to leave.
AJ.
I'm almost becomeing a bore when it comes to your poetry...I liked this one too. I loved the repitition and 2nd Billy's comment that this is a form of pantoume.
Although for me this has some sad undertones and currents running through it I feel.
I got an image of a mentally weak or disturbed person from that last line and found it very poignant.
(I know a mental patient who came along [by the bus load as an outing] to my last church. He used to do an amazing a grafically correct of Michael Jackson doing his thriller dance...which he always perfomed at least once durring the service to any of the upbeat songs. It was always amusing to watch the reactions of any visitors that week.
But your poem made me think of this wonderful character and what might have been his experiance in life if he had not been in a careing enviroment).
sorry this was a bit of an odd comment to leave.
AJ.