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School changing room
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03-12-2013, 07:16 PM
well damn blast I really like this. The repetition is great [I have a fascination with repetition and this poem is just my cup of tea on that front]. The whole thing works for me, content, phrasing and of course repetition. It could be a little tighter, but it's hardly anything to mention. thanks.
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School changing room - by Keith - 03-12-2013, 08:05 AM
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RE: Dance away - by newsclippings - 03-12-2013, 05:49 PM
RE: Dance away - by Keith - 03-12-2013, 06:05 PM
RE: Dance away - by newsclippings - 03-12-2013, 06:08 PM
RE: Dance away - by shemthepenman - 03-12-2013, 07:16 PM
RE: Dance away - by billy - 03-12-2013, 10:28 PM
RE: Dance away - by serge gurkski - 03-12-2013, 11:47 PM
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