03-12-2013, 03:50 PM
I like this poem. =) The only gripe I have is with the repetition of silent petals. I think it'll work better as 'in silent,/silent petals.'
Here's my move and poem!
Let’s Talk Over a Cup of Coffee
dxe5
You’re in your seat,
comfy I presume.
Audience to a one man drama
as my story spills.
Words come flooding out,
louder than they should be.
Gestures hard and big,
as if I’m crazy.
I see a slight frown, and you shifting back a bit;
avoiding my fingers pointing, hands waving
with a little too much intensity.
It’s kind of pointless, and hollow even.
A drama needs something that matters,
not a spoilt brat’s whining.
This boring play continues a little while more,
until you got too bored.
Then you say
“Coffee. It’s kind of melancholic.”
And that’s the end of the story.
Here's my move and poem!
Let’s Talk Over a Cup of Coffee
dxe5
You’re in your seat,
comfy I presume.
Audience to a one man drama
as my story spills.
Words come flooding out,
louder than they should be.
Gestures hard and big,
as if I’m crazy.
I see a slight frown, and you shifting back a bit;
avoiding my fingers pointing, hands waving
with a little too much intensity.
It’s kind of pointless, and hollow even.
A drama needs something that matters,
not a spoilt brat’s whining.
This boring play continues a little while more,
until you got too bored.
Then you say
“Coffee. It’s kind of melancholic.”
And that’s the end of the story.
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