Really like the poem. I'd consider killing the end punctuation as you have quite a few strophe breaks where the phrasing flows well when you lose the end stops. I realize that isn't technically correct, but there it is.
Let's just keep attacking shall we.
Wet Knife
e5
You mistake it for a flower,
a thorn under the skin
near the heart--
a lover's bouquet streaming
through your fingertips
in silent petals,
silent petals.
Let's just keep attacking shall we.
Wet Knife
e5
You mistake it for a flower,
a thorn under the skin
near the heart--
a lover's bouquet streaming
through your fingertips
in silent petals,
silent petals.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson