Prostituting for Beginners Edit 1, professional advice from leanne

[tectak]

i've seen all the frivolity going on and i'm not sure it's a good thing, the cock slapping post did give me a giggle though anyway, i'll give some serious feedback below.

I'm going in deep.
(Love me, babe, love me like you know me.) is this line needed?
I'm going in slow.is this line needed?
(Hurt me, babe, in this dark I am your pain.)is this line needed?
I'm going in hard.is this line needed?
(Feel me, babe, for just this time, you own me)is this line needed?
I'm going in fast.is this line needed?
(Fuck me, babe, again,again,again)is this line needed?
I'm going in fast.is this line needed?
( Kill me, babe, take me to the sky)is this line needed?
I'm going in fast.is this line needed?
( Love me, babe, love me like you care)is this line needed?
l'm coming, you're mine.is this line needed?
(Love me, babe, love me 'til I cry)is this line needed?
I'm coming, I'M THERE!is this line needed? (the shout had me laughig out loud)
(Love me...love me...love me...love me...love me...LOVE ME)is this line needed?

tectak
2013

all in all tom, it was a great edit

Billy, you are incorrigible!
I can see you standing there in your stained long-johns, going through the loose copper in a knotted handkerchief, still redded up....and asking for change from a fifty-pence piece!
No....none of the lines are needed...it is an unsaid piece...should be all in the mind...as I am sure it is in yours!
Best,
tectak ( Funny how crap gets the most interesting comments!)