03-10-2013, 07:52 PM
Thanks for the comments, billy. I definitely agree with the trimming and I'll correct the punctuation mistakes.
The imagery is going to take some thinking.
I was just telling a friend of mine that I needed to get rid of the first stanza, but it is a very emotional part of the poem for me, so perhaps I'll try to keep it if I can make it work.
I'll also work on that clarifying thoughtfulness. I have to get there myself
Thanks again
Oh! And yes. A frenemy is a friend/enemy.
The imagery is going to take some thinking.
I was just telling a friend of mine that I needed to get rid of the first stanza, but it is a very emotional part of the poem for me, so perhaps I'll try to keep it if I can make it work.
I'll also work on that clarifying thoughtfulness. I have to get there myself
Thanks again
Oh! And yes. A frenemy is a friend/enemy.