I disagree, Serge -- it's poems like this that invite one to express audible bowel movements. However, M. le Tak is fortunate in that the doctors do not recommend euthanasia just yet. This poem may yet be rescued with judicious mouth-to-- well, somewhere -- rescuscitation.
I tend to prefer the original end line... especially since it follows all those loud demands for attention. You do build a good crescendo.
I tend to prefer the original end line... especially since it follows all those loud demands for attention. You do build a good crescendo.
It could be worse