03-10-2013, 10:13 AM
(03-10-2013, 09:59 AM)saeity Wrote: Oh Tictak- this is so not refreshing, if ever there was a piece in which a newbie should be forced to get your cock out and smack you round the face- this is it. Not sure what's more crass, the believing of feeling more superior or the believing of feeling more superiorHi saeity,
Believe you are the jester of these parts therefore will receive it in the manner it is given
saeity.
I think of the two the former is the...er...crassest(?).
I may have to take your punishment on the chin...if you can imagine that.
Not sure if you read the reply to leanne before you replied...and even less sure that it would make any difference. This poem is what is called, technically " Not very Good".
I am going to persevere with it, though. I avoid, and tell others to avoid, writing in commitment verse in the first person as it may make readers believe you ARE the character. Not a bad thing unless your wife reads it, but by using this semi-soliloquy approach I hope to get away with murder amongst other things.
If it works it works, if it doesn't, tell me...or punish me.
Best,
tectak