A Poem: Edit

[justcloudy]

I know others will disagree, but I like all the "and"s at the end. I feel like they anchor the rest.

But I might change this part a bit:
"It feels more right than that
more familiar than
Breathing."
something of that sort... right and good both is too much.

some of the images are really great, others are a bit commonplace. I love the flirty toes, I'd take away the hands part, just distracts.

thanks for the read.