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03-09-2013, 07:04 AM

Hi,
I enoyed this very much.
One quick thing I picked up - did you mean choke in S2 L2.
Personally I also like to see some punctuation.

Thanks for the read
AJ.

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Because - by Aphroditeny - 03-09-2013, 03:15 AM

RE: Because - by saeity - 03-09-2013, 05:41 AM

RE: Because - by cidermaid - 03-09-2013, 07:04 AM

RE: Because - by Aphroditeny - 03-09-2013, 08:41 AM

RE: Because - by Tommy - 03-09-2013, 10:01 AM

RE: Because - by Aphroditeny - 03-15-2013, 11:33 PM

RE: Because - by Jae Mc Donnell - 03-16-2013, 01:52 AM

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