03-07-2013, 04:18 PM
(03-06-2013, 11:00 PM)Bloggsworth Wrote:Best,
Women understand that
while buying shoes is a necessityWhilst
wearing them is optional.
tectak
(03-07-2013, 06:32 AM)Bloggsworth Wrote:(03-07-2013, 06:03 AM)tectak Wrote:(03-07-2013, 03:49 AM)Bloggsworth Wrote:No. It is too long(03-07-2013, 03:23 AM)tectak Wrote:If Hemmingway's(03-06-2013, 11:00 PM)Bloggsworth Wrote:This is a poetry site of necessity. It is not an option. Read the rules.
Women understand that
while buying shoes is a necessity
wearing them is optional.
tectak
For salecolon
baby shoescomma
never wornfull stop
This is likely to be plagiarised by Hemmingway...and is still not generally accepted as a story. Hemmingway himself went on to explain.
Nonetheless, as with War and Peace, I skipped most of your poem and went straight to the last line to see how it turned out.
There. Proper crit.
Best,
tectak
Is acceptable as a complete short story....
The women who have seen it acknowledge it as accurate!
Please elucidate - Seen from your lofty intellectual perch is it too short?Sorry if I seemed a little blunt. That was not the intention....I need knocking off the lofty perch regularly.
I just feel that if there is little to crit you get little crit.
I know that you have stuck a few good crits up but billy HAS just changed the rules and I was taking advantage of them. When wrong....say wrong. I am wrong.
Best,
tectak


