03-03-2013, 06:22 PM
Hi,
Sorry but for me this poem was a bit like having a very small teaspoon of sorbet...a single fleeting hit of flavour then it is all over and quickly dissapates leaving me with nothing. There is nothing wrong with the idea or length as such, it just lacks substance in my opinion and reads like an old sayings or proverb.
I would have liked some punctuation.
AJ
Sorry but for me this poem was a bit like having a very small teaspoon of sorbet...a single fleeting hit of flavour then it is all over and quickly dissapates leaving me with nothing. There is nothing wrong with the idea or length as such, it just lacks substance in my opinion and reads like an old sayings or proverb.
I would have liked some punctuation.
AJ