03-02-2013, 11:24 PM
Hi Todd,
I had to read this a few times to let it soak in. It's a beautiful portrait, I can just see him playing on the living room floor, asking daddy to read Go, Dog. Go! "just one more time!"
I might work on the end though. The image doesn't work for me... the father doesn't know what his son is or will be, yet the son is riding him as camel through the desert (life, the world, I assume). I get it, but it doesn't round it off as well as it could. Maybe since it's about the son's first day of school, a school bus becomes the camel? The horrible reality of letting his son go out into the desert alone hits him?
Just a thought.
Lovely read, thanks much.
I had to read this a few times to let it soak in. It's a beautiful portrait, I can just see him playing on the living room floor, asking daddy to read Go, Dog. Go! "just one more time!"
I might work on the end though. The image doesn't work for me... the father doesn't know what his son is or will be, yet the son is riding him as camel through the desert (life, the world, I assume). I get it, but it doesn't round it off as well as it could. Maybe since it's about the son's first day of school, a school bus becomes the camel? The horrible reality of letting his son go out into the desert alone hits him?
Just a thought.
Lovely read, thanks much.
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The howling beast is back.
The howling beast is back.