03-02-2013, 05:22 PM
Hope you do not mind me addressing you both in one post. 
Hi Leanne, Ensconcing, you're right, looking back i liked the word but think it's superfluous to the piece. Thanks for picking up on the tense, amazing what you can miss
Hi Tectak, line breaks are a terrible habit of mine and i sometimes use them instead of proper punctuation, with guidance i know i can stop.
The word porn was deliberate i did mean it for it's sexual connotations, this was a game in which N was made to play. i shall address my line breaks with proper punctuation, as for crap poetry, one can only strive to get better
Thankyou both for time and patience
saeity.
Hi Leanne, Ensconcing, you're right, looking back i liked the word but think it's superfluous to the piece. Thanks for picking up on the tense, amazing what you can miss
Hi Tectak, line breaks are a terrible habit of mine and i sometimes use them instead of proper punctuation, with guidance i know i can stop.
The word porn was deliberate i did mean it for it's sexual connotations, this was a game in which N was made to play. i shall address my line breaks with proper punctuation, as for crap poetry, one can only strive to get better
Thankyou both for time and patience
saeity.