the poet

[billy]

hi goldy.

i wonder if something more solid than the 1st 'They say' who say?
i think some of the wordyness is excessive in a couple of places. i enjoy the feel of rant in the lower part of the poem but i think you need more of a punch. i almost missed parts 2 and three because of the large gaps between stanza.

not bad but i think it does need a bit more depth.
thanks for the read.

THE POET, part 1

the most important thing
they say
“they say”
is WRITE
and write
and right, I’ve been willing i like the transition
I’ve been wanting
but I’ve been waiting
for some spark to sparkle
some words, a phrase
to substantize behind my eyes
and resonate
and echo in my brain

I wait for that interior beat i like this line, it's feels like hope
tiny tight fists
pummel
until I release
onto paper
onto a screen
a scream
my scream

it pleads to be let out
outside the maze
of uncategorized swirls
mixing dark and light and color
that populate
my mind











THE POET, part 2

create something new:
a writer's work
something yet unseen
something yet unborn
yet thought up

7 billion versions
viewpoints
visions
of the same old life
the same old world
we all know.
eyes see differently
but can words
say differently?
there are not 7 billion words the permutations of words in the english language are arguably infinte. but i get the frift of pointlessness, the how am i supposed to be original questioning
in any language.

we know
what is known
we know
what is seen
and felt and sipped
from the cup of life
and to repeat it blandly
colors lacking
flavors dull
makes no artist.

and no writer cannot be an artist too










THE POET, part 3

CREATE they say
you cannot CONSUME
they say
if you do not create
you are not welcome
if you do not participate
in our dance around the world
do not upset
our precarious balance
tiptoe on the top
of the rotating globe
full of those who gobble
powered by those who make i think this stanza works well, poets like evryone else are often made to feel as though they should be shoehorned into some kind of box...critic's are part of that problem also but maybe a positive part. this stanza feel a bit like a rant (which isn't a bad thing )
one false step
and it'll tip
with the rest
into shit. i love the closure.