02-28-2013, 07:24 AM
thanks all for the suggestions!
yes yes I always imagined it read aloud also. =]
I have a thing for long poems, long books, long essays etc, but point taken, for external audiences this is pretty verbose.
also, part of the reason I joined this forum is because although I write quite a bit, I don't read a whole lot of poetry... just a couple favorite authors. probably bad of me, but it makes for the fact that I don't always know what's overdone/ cliche. anyway now I'll get to change that a bit. =]
thanks again for the feedback, I'll work on it when I have time and post an edited down version.
yes yes I always imagined it read aloud also. =]
I have a thing for long poems, long books, long essays etc, but point taken, for external audiences this is pretty verbose.
also, part of the reason I joined this forum is because although I write quite a bit, I don't read a whole lot of poetry... just a couple favorite authors. probably bad of me, but it makes for the fact that I don't always know what's overdone/ cliche. anyway now I'll get to change that a bit. =]
thanks again for the feedback, I'll work on it when I have time and post an edited down version.
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