02-27-2013, 11:40 PM
hi love phantom and welcome to the site.
there are some grammar problems. in the 2nd line it should be sorrow's i think, and on the 3rd it should be sprout.
other than that it's not too bad, if you use microsoft word it should help with the grammar side of things.
the problem the poem does have is that it has no specifics, some depth would improve the poem a lot
there are some grammar problems. in the 2nd line it should be sorrow's i think, and on the 3rd it should be sprout.
other than that it's not too bad, if you use microsoft word it should help with the grammar side of things.
the problem the poem does have is that it has no specifics, some depth would improve the poem a lot