02-27-2013, 09:25 PM
Hi ho!
First I want to say that i have been writing poetry for a while, but always in Spanish or Catalan (my 2 first languages), but as I am now living in India, it kinda came to me writing in English!
I just wrote 5 or 6 poems so far and I still have a lot to learn and to go in English poetry! So I will post one of them now and I accept all kind of critics! Please take in mind English is my 3rd language, so I may even have grammar, spelling or other kind of errors (even if I rechecked them for that many times!)... sorry if any, and thank you for the help!
Sorrow's rain
From sadness clouds
falls sorrow's rain,
my feelings' sprouts
reborn and drained.
Dead whereabouts
will now remain,
some silent shouts
of death from pain.
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Love Phantom ^_^
EDIT: Changed the title of the post.
EDIT 2: Fixed a grammar problem.
EDIT 3, 4 and 5: More grammar mistakes.
First I want to say that i have been writing poetry for a while, but always in Spanish or Catalan (my 2 first languages), but as I am now living in India, it kinda came to me writing in English!
I just wrote 5 or 6 poems so far and I still have a lot to learn and to go in English poetry! So I will post one of them now and I accept all kind of critics! Please take in mind English is my 3rd language, so I may even have grammar, spelling or other kind of errors (even if I rechecked them for that many times!)... sorry if any, and thank you for the help!
Sorrow's rain
From sadness clouds
falls sorrow's rain,
my feelings' sprouts
reborn and drained.
Dead whereabouts
will now remain,
some silent shouts
of death from pain.
---
Love Phantom ^_^
EDIT: Changed the title of the post.
EDIT 2: Fixed a grammar problem.
EDIT 3, 4 and 5: More grammar mistakes.