Where I lay my head edit 2 newsclippings, pet ak

[tectak]

in manchester, (stretford) thanks for the kind words, i think the probs are there becaue you're doing the meter thing with the iambs, instead of the normal narratives that you excell at. it's good to see poets trying stuff outside their normal comfort zones.

Yep. I'm working on some syllable count verse to go with strict rhythm. I have a nephew in law in Cleckeaton (Liversedge) who is a keen member of a punk band (Zapaian-not my bag!)
Some of their stuff is like death by machine gun but if I get enough angst in a subject they like to belt it out. Trouble is you need to have simple but very strict verse. It is not where I am comfortable .
This one is worth playing with as a keeper for me.....that's as far as it will run.
Best,
stay warm,
Tom