02-21-2013, 11:08 PM
(02-21-2013, 04:52 PM)tectak Wrote: Holy shit leanne...anyone could read this and realise he ATE the baby. I apologise, mark, for leanne's incredible lack of insight.Why does everyone think it is fine to have a laugh because my poem has problems?
Then, after he ate the baby, he was surprised that his sister, the baby's mother and
his wife, came in to his den with a bunch of girly flowers, and suggested that another sandwich was in order.Good stuff markThese rednecks need some good press.
I totally don't get what is so fucking funny. You act as if I had tried to insult your intelligence by asking for feedback.
I would never belittle your work.
(02-21-2013, 04:52 PM)tectak Wrote: Seriously, though. There is too much missing, mark. Terse verse needs detail and depth. A lot in a little. Unless we all KNOW what this is about , say a news item or well documented story from a known source, the piece loses credibility.You honest opinion is appreciated, however your having fun at my expense is not.


These rednecks need some good press.