02-21-2013, 07:21 PM
HA! Love the idea!! think the rhyme and rhythms need to be tidied up, they're just a bit all over the place... first one is my favourite if it can be tidied up so it just rolls off the tongue...atm it just feels awkward to read.
great idea though!
great idea though!
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And we are the dreamers of dreams
Wandering by lone sea breakers
And sitting by desolate streams" ~ Arthur O'Shaughnessy
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And we are the dreamers of dreams
Wandering by lone sea breakers
And sitting by desolate streams" ~ Arthur O'Shaughnessy
http://invisibleshadows86.blogspot.co.uk/
My journey