Handbasket

[Wildcard]

Okay Mark, I may be horribly off can I guess at the meaning?

Handbasket is a nod to the relationship going to hell in a...

What is swaddled is her heart that she wants to give to him.

He mistakes the basket for a picnic basket and asks for a sandwich. He wants a domestic partner.

She sees dreams and wild flowers.

The gory remnants of her heart will be seen much later when it all goes wrong.

Like I said I'm probably off, but that was my read.

Best,

Todd

God bless you Todd

Now what do I do to get that across to a majority rather than having everyone think I am being purposefully vague and unclear?

Thanks for all the feedback.

EDIT:

Handbasket is a nod to the relationship going to hell in a...

^ that is the key . . .

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further, as a poem of obscurity, it needs more 'concept'; if you are trying to play with concepts then i could write them on the back of a postage stamp.

If this poem is obscure it is not intentional. Nevertheless your feedback is appreciated.

I am fascinated but irritated in equal measure

Irritated how?

I don't think this belongs in serious critique.

The various 'levels' of critique have nothing to do with the skill of the author, but rather the level of in-depth critique desired.

I realize that I am a novice, but I still desire in-depth critique if anyone is willing to give it.