02-20-2013, 01:26 PM
Thanks hobbit, Leanne, tec, for the encouragement. And for Leanne and tec basically admitting that I'm a weirdo. 
Hobbit, tec, thanks for the feedback. =) I'm honestly not expecting much of them because this poem really sucks. I just penned down how I felt after thinking about it a little, then edited it a bit. By the way Hobbit, the 2nd line in the first stanza is a cushion of sorts, since the fear is more a discomfort than full blown terror. Kind of like the 'if it even exists' line in the 2nd stanza to remove the feeling of actual suffocation. Am I making sense? Hope so. >< Am really glad that you took the time to give me such detailed critique. =) The first edit is up, so I hope it actually makes the poem better. Not much confidence there though. Oh, and tec, I don't think room 101 is the right metaphor here. Isn't it supposed to be the torture room that tortures you based on your fears?
Hobbit, tec, thanks for the feedback. =) I'm honestly not expecting much of them because this poem really sucks. I just penned down how I felt after thinking about it a little, then edited it a bit. By the way Hobbit, the 2nd line in the first stanza is a cushion of sorts, since the fear is more a discomfort than full blown terror. Kind of like the 'if it even exists' line in the 2nd stanza to remove the feeling of actual suffocation. Am I making sense? Hope so. >< Am really glad that you took the time to give me such detailed critique. =) The first edit is up, so I hope it actually makes the poem better. Not much confidence there though. Oh, and tec, I don't think room 101 is the right metaphor here. Isn't it supposed to be the torture room that tortures you based on your fears?
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