Where I Lay my Head ( Early Valentine Card)

[newsclippings]

In this room, I lay with loves I met.
I filed away the images I knew
would rise again, like wraiths of raw regret;
and that one day I’d say goodbye to you. -- mer. cliche line, but the thought is valid.
You lie beside me as the light disclaims -- I guess this is a cool word but my frilly little mind doesn't like it so much.
the greyed out phantoms, fantasies still clear.
I see her move across my recalled frames
and taste once more the sweetness of her tears. -- meh.
Then there was the long and snow-deep night;
another sat upon this bed and cried.
I watched her rise, naked in the light,
dress slowly, leaving with her pride.

I look to where a silhouette still lies;
her name was kept, she never made it known.
We thrashed and threw our passion to dark skies
but when I woke and called her…she was gone.

I damn you for your bodies, ageless, pure!
Why do the recollections stay so new?
How could I love so long, yet be unsure?
Goodbye past loves, another day with you. -- silly ending, you can do better than this. the subject of your poem is stronger than your ending, and this here leaves me disappointed.
Tectak
Jan 2013

While I like this very much the bold lines didn't sit with me very well.