My very first poem \(^0^)/

[hobbit86]

This is really good first poem.

The rhyme and rhythm in stanza 2 just seems absolutely spot on, and I just LOVE the imagery of a key on the tongue to unlock the voice inside.

Can real feel the sense of trapment in oneself, of secrets unheard.

Really good poem. I'm still novice myself, so not much to say, but I think perhaps the first stanza needs a little bit of touching up with the rhyme, not sure if the first 2 lines rhyme is forced?

Really good poem. thanks for sharing