02-18-2013, 03:45 AM
I am completely new to poetry, and know next to nothing about it. I am looking for any advice and critique, as long as it's useful and nice. I would also like to know what type of poem I would count this as. Anyway, I look forward to potential responses. ^^
I wait in my cell for my guard to arrive
And untie my lips with old rusted knives.
With my mouth agape and eyes like the ocean,
I can't help but feel engulfed by emotion.
I notice a key on the tip of my tongue,
Hidden away from when I was young.
Consumed long ago in a daze of fear,
I locked it inside so no one could hear
The thoughts in my mind
Buried so deep
For no one to find,
And leave me to weep.
Could now be the time
To open the hole
And let my "no one"
Peer into my soul?
I swallow the key,
Return to my cell,
And relive my crime
With no one to tell.
I wait in my cell for my guard to arrive
And untie my lips with old rusted knives.
With my mouth agape and eyes like the ocean,
I can't help but feel engulfed by emotion.
I notice a key on the tip of my tongue,
Hidden away from when I was young.
Consumed long ago in a daze of fear,
I locked it inside so no one could hear
The thoughts in my mind
Buried so deep
For no one to find,
And leave me to weep.
Could now be the time
To open the hole
And let my "no one"
Peer into my soul?
I swallow the key,
Return to my cell,
And relive my crime
With no one to tell.