02-17-2013, 09:55 AM
It is written in a very plain way, nothing is hidden, the reader is not called upon to extract meanings for himself/herself. If I were to make suggestions, I should just be writing my poem, not yours, as others on here have wisely said elsewhere. The final line could be dropped, but it actually has great significance for those concerned (though I should imagine that Kristallnacht would have been the last straw for most). So it would be good to retain it, and I should be inclined to do this by commencing the poem with that line, and ending it likewise. I think that would re-double the sense that that is what the thing is about.