02-17-2013, 06:53 AM
then for me the poem failed. it doesn't feel gindberg-esque.
it feels forced, there's a theme there but it doesn't come across clearly, for a first poem it's great but it feel devoid of of emotion, depoth, life, death or any other thing that makes a poem felt. it's much better than my first poem, the good thing is that you will grow as poet the more you write.
it feels forced, there's a theme there but it doesn't come across clearly, for a first poem it's great but it feel devoid of of emotion, depoth, life, death or any other thing that makes a poem felt. it's much better than my first poem, the good thing is that you will grow as poet the more you write.