02-17-2013, 06:11 AM
Really good poem, and great to see someones interpretation of events.
When I first started reading it, I thought it was going to be a poem filled of happy memories of someones father, until the 4th line. Really moving.
The lack of punctuation doesn't bother me too much as it's still easy to read.
I normally like poems to be separated into stanzas (just my personal choice as I struggle to read big blocks of writing), but this is short enough to stay as 1 verse.
The imagery and the message conveyed is good. Really enjoyed reading this.
(sorry for the not so good critic...I couldn't find anything to pick up on...just the lack of punctuation)
When I first started reading it, I thought it was going to be a poem filled of happy memories of someones father, until the 4th line. Really moving.
The lack of punctuation doesn't bother me too much as it's still easy to read.
I normally like poems to be separated into stanzas (just my personal choice as I struggle to read big blocks of writing), but this is short enough to stay as 1 verse.
The imagery and the message conveyed is good. Really enjoyed reading this.
(sorry for the not so good critic...I couldn't find anything to pick up on...just the lack of punctuation)
"We are the music makers
And we are the dreamers of dreams
Wandering by lone sea breakers
And sitting by desolate streams" ~ Arthur O'Shaughnessy
http://invisibleshadows86.blogspot.co.uk/
My journey
And we are the dreamers of dreams
Wandering by lone sea breakers
And sitting by desolate streams" ~ Arthur O'Shaughnessy
http://invisibleshadows86.blogspot.co.uk/
My journey