02-17-2013, 05:18 AM
[Cheers Heart, I am aware I have a problem with punctuation, something I have to work on. This was inspired by a Tv programme I watched where despite thinking you know all there is to know about the lead up and the actual events of the holocaust there is always something new and horrific that surprises you.
Hi smiffy, I found this a very moving read. I am interpreting it to be about the 1938 deportation of jews. The yellow star representing the
badge marked "jude". I am not bothered by your lack of punctuation
here but it can have an impact for some. I feel you could break this
into 2 stanzas, the 2nd beginning with line 6. I enjoyed reading this powerful piece very much.
my best,
Heart
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Hi smiffy, I found this a very moving read. I am interpreting it to be about the 1938 deportation of jews. The yellow star representing the
badge marked "jude". I am not bothered by your lack of punctuation
here but it can have an impact for some. I feel you could break this
into 2 stanzas, the 2nd beginning with line 6. I enjoyed reading this powerful piece very much.
my best,
Heart
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