02-17-2013, 12:05 AM
Hello schmitler and welcome to the site.
Great job for your first ettempt at poetry. There are some nice lines in here.
This line could be great to form a poem around if you lose "of rhythm".
"Lost in natural confusion of rhythm, joy is there somewhere, screaming to be released."
Thank you for the read and I hope to read more from you.
Great job for your first ettempt at poetry. There are some nice lines in here.
This line could be great to form a poem around if you lose "of rhythm".
"Lost in natural confusion of rhythm, joy is there somewhere, screaming to be released."
Thank you for the read and I hope to read more from you.