02-16-2013, 04:58 PM
looks and read 100% better,
no feedback here but i think you could do well work-shopping it.
it has lots of potential
you have some great lines at work (as well as some not so great
)
i did enjoy the read
no feedback here but i think you could do well work-shopping it.
it has lots of potential
you have some great lines at work (as well as some not so great
) i did enjoy the read