02-16-2013, 08:12 AM
well i think you it did work,
i got the whole book thing, them being used tec so the poem is pretty much working. all i think you need do is a small edit when my my mind sees the word erect ....it's probably just me
the first stanza gave me most of the info, the title with salts (stains on pages) gave me some help as well.
the last stanza also gave me the book idea and built on the first stanza. i think the edit if any could help the 2nd stanza.
i'm not sure the simile is doing a good enough job.
i got the whole book thing, them being used tec so the poem is pretty much working. all i think you need do is a small edit when my my mind sees the word erect ....it's probably just me
the first stanza gave me most of the info, the title with salts (stains on pages) gave me some help as well.
the last stanza also gave me the book idea and built on the first stanza. i think the edit if any could help the 2nd stanza.
i'm not sure the simile is doing a good enough job.