02-15-2013, 07:43 AM
what do you think about it's length, i'd say yes, take each line and make a new stanza or verse out of it. are you speaking of yourself or of a specific person or everyone in general? as for a title...something to do with waking up that doesn't use the word awake,
(02-15-2013, 03:45 AM)hobbit86 Wrote: To live is to feel the breath of emotion upon your cheek
To hear a whisper of truth within your ear.
It gently caresses your dreams into awakening
It holds your hand as you cross the river of uncertainty.
Invisible Shadows 2012
I'm stuck for a title for this...
When I wrote this I'd intended a proper poem of a few stanzas...but it just felt like everything I needed to say was said in those 4 lines...it'd be nice to make it a proper length poem, but just can't think how to expand it....is it better short, would it spoil it to add to it? or is it missing something?
it's definately missing a title...so that'd be good
