02-14-2013, 11:40 PM
Before I comment on the poem I have to say something.
With little changes this poem could relate to a feminine or submissive male straight or gay and the male part could be flipped for a masculine or dominant female straight or gay and what about transgender people. I would like to think most intellectual people would have moved beyond these archaic gender roles and understand that anything along those lines is very sexist and discriminant against humans, all humans.
Few comments on the poem.
With little changes this poem could relate to a feminine or submissive male straight or gay and the male part could be flipped for a masculine or dominant female straight or gay and what about transgender people. I would like to think most intellectual people would have moved beyond these archaic gender roles and understand that anything along those lines is very sexist and discriminant against humans, all humans.
Few comments on the poem.
(02-12-2013, 08:01 AM)nothing_good16 Wrote: Men?
Since when?
Useless creatures
with unbecoming features. This stanza read very well, great job.
Have you forgotten that we friend with diamonds? This line reads a bit off for me. I'm not really sure what your trying to say
Girl,
don't dismiss your worth.
Remember,
our depths come from deep within the Earth. depths and deep don't work well together, maybe roots for depths
Don't lie with the dogs,
you'll end up with disease. Great line and messege to all
Stand up unless you're praying
and get up off your knees.
There's enough man in woman. This doesn't come across as you want it to.
For God made us to stand alone.
You better understand
and get up on your throne!