Voices Within My Head

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Hi Hobbit, never put yourself down for having a limited vocabulary, I'm the same but for me it is the way you use what you have that counts, I hate nothing more than continually reaching for the dictionary to understand a poem. I'm quite sure you have enough ordinary words floating round your head to make a fist of anything you care to write. I always remember a dear friend and damn fine poet telling me less is almost always more, Billy had some good suggestions in that area.

I see what you mean; instead of using words that allows the reader to use their imagination, I've used words which are more 'plain'.

Thanks for the critique..this is probably my favourite poem of mine, so I put it into the 'serious' critique so I could see ways to make it better. Thanks for all crits, I'll have a go sometime to improve it bearing in mind peoples comments. Changing the words used...I perhaps have too limited vocabulary to be writing poetry, but will try and improve on the plain and simple descriptions.

Appreciate the comments
Thank you