Words of love

[hobbit86]

I'm not a huge fan of romantic poetry; but there is something special about love between an aged couple, and you do capture this

Smile sweetly in your way
Remembering a winter’s day
Our separate lives were put away
With promises of love

has got to be my favourite stanza, although it'd be a cold winters day, you can feel the warmth of their love.


In silence I know you will hear
All the words of love we shared
Freed from breath but spoken still
In memories of love

Just beautiful...I always imagine old people sitting in silence, with nothing more to say...nothing else needed to say...just content to be together. Nothing left to do, no careers to get in their way, just memories and love to share.

I too feel the 4th stanza spoils the poem...you;ve gone from something so gentle and pure in their love...to something that is a mundane stress - debt...cut that one out and I think it'd be a great poem.