02-13-2013, 11:41 AM
I see what you mean; instead of using words that allows the reader to use their imagination, I've used words which are more 'plain'.
Thanks for the critique..this is probably my favourite poem of mine, so I put it into the 'serious' critique so I could see ways to make it better. Thanks for all crits, I'll have a go sometime to improve it bearing in mind peoples comments. Changing the words used...I perhaps have too limited vocabulary to be writing poetry, but will try and improve on the plain and simple descriptions.
Appreciate the comments
Thank you
Thanks for the critique..this is probably my favourite poem of mine, so I put it into the 'serious' critique so I could see ways to make it better. Thanks for all crits, I'll have a go sometime to improve it bearing in mind peoples comments. Changing the words used...I perhaps have too limited vocabulary to be writing poetry, but will try and improve on the plain and simple descriptions.
Appreciate the comments
Thank you
"We are the music makers
And we are the dreamers of dreams
Wandering by lone sea breakers
And sitting by desolate streams" ~ Arthur O'Shaughnessy
http://invisibleshadows86.blogspot.co.uk/
My journey
And we are the dreamers of dreams
Wandering by lone sea breakers
And sitting by desolate streams" ~ Arthur O'Shaughnessy
http://invisibleshadows86.blogspot.co.uk/
My journey

