A Lover's Suicide

[billy]

the last two lines feel trite, you need a comma after the 1st pulled unless the 2nd one is typo. the poem isn't bad and i enjoyed it but it did lack a few images. at present it's too much tell, some of the cliche could be replaced. a great effort, but it needs a good edit. the poem is about a lovers suicide, the title says it all, which sort of makes the poem less that what it actually is.