After Ever After (revision)

[billy]

the links not working but i see what you did. it reads very well and the refrains were easy and non intrusive. great effort

A child's tale is often sad. is there half a foot missing here, or are you seeing childs as chi-ilds
Imagination won't transform.
A wardrobe may change king to lad,
but old inside they must conform. this line is the only nit for me, i'm just not sure how to read it.

Imagination won't transform.
A frosted cake can't make them grow,
but old inside they must conform.
The looking glass cannot bestow.

A frosted cake can't make them grow,
nor shattered shoe upon the stair.
The looking glass cannot bestow
a ballroom dance without a snare. i really like this stanza, this last line particularly, snare feels good on more than one level.

A wardrobe may change king to lad.
A child's tale is often sad.






(Title change Pantoum Sonnet from the chess thread with Brandon. Here's the form: http://bensonofjohn.co.uk/poetry/formsse...m%20Sonnet )