Refresh me with apples (an experiment)

[heslopian]

Apparently this form is called Nonet (1st line 9 syllables decreasing down to line 9 with just 1 syllable...then i reversed it just because).


Refresh me with apples.

Like an apple tree, my fine lover. Could you switch these clauses? As it is this line feels like truncated dialogue. I didn't realise until I'd read the poem once that the narrator's comparing her lover to an apple tree.
A billowing love banner blush
A blanket of confetti.
He supports and shades me.
I partake of his, Why is there a comma here?
laid out banquet.
Refreshed,
I
faint. I kind of like how "I" and "faint" each have their own lines. It gives the impression of falling, which of course one does while fainting.
Crushed fruit,
a felled tree.
Lumber harvest.
The logos logged fuel.
Distilled aromatics.
An outstanding apple tree.
Fragrance filled, alabaster jar,
broken, but not stumped – a new tree grows.


(I know...not much to recommend, the text is predictably boring. Just like experimenting with new forms)

You have some good stuff here, but there isn't a natural rhythm. Rather it feels like a slideshow of poetic images. The images are good, they just don't have a unifying flow. JMHO, of course. Thank you for the read